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花花

<;P><FONT color=#ff0000 size=4><b>建个本子，请老师和师兄师姐们指正！</b></FONT></P>

花花

<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; mso-line-height-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm><FONT size=4>黄鹤楼</FONT></P>
<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; mso-line-height-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm><FONT size=4></FONT></P>
<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; mso-line-height-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm><FONT size=4>邀白云入盏，黄鹤作陪，直把河山收眼底</FONT>
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<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; mso-line-height-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm><FONT size=4>慕崔颢之名，李白之采，且将笔墨满行囊</FONT>
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<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; mso-line-height-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm><FONT size=4></FONT></P>
<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; mso-line-height-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm><FONT size=4></FONT>
<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; mso-line-height-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm><FONT size=4>长江滚滚，一泻千年归眼底</FONT>
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<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; mso-line-height-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm><FONT size=4>黄鹤空空，留芳几世隐碑中</FONT></P>
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[此贴子已经被作者于2009-6-15 11:54:22编辑过]

花魂鸟梦

<P>我不知道该找啥题来学习，就只好跟着师姐们背后走了。起了个早，先凑了这三个，后面的再慢慢凑了</P>
<P>【全国卷】</P>
<P WORD-BREAK: white; break-all?><FONT size=3>人无完美，何必行行拔萃
</FONT>
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<P WORD-BREAK: white; break-all?><FONT size=3>技有不同，岂能样样精通</FONT>



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<P>【北京卷】
<P WORD-BREAK: white; break-all?><FONT size=3>天高难阻凌云志

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<P WORD-BREAK: white; break-all?><FONT size=3>路远犹怀破海心</FONT>
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<P>【上海卷】</P>
<P WORD-BREAK: white; break-all?><FONT size=3>我入字魂，何须有二

</P></FONT>
<P WORD-BREAK: white; break-all?><FONT size=3>字含我魄，必定只一</FONT>



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[此贴子已经被作者于2009-6-17 23:05:24编辑过]

花花

<P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4>嵌字诗钟：好/闲，从一到七唱任意嵌。<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4>好笔从来题绝句<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4>闲笺自古待骚人<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4></FONT> </P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4>得好还须思已过<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4>偷闲不可忘天恩<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4></FONT> </P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4>谁家好事托春寄<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4>此处闲云对燕播（今音）<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4></FONT> </P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4>一春花好为酬月<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4>满岭云闲妄锁风<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4></FONT> </P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4>一岸清风闲醉月<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt" align=left><FONT size=4>满池荷盏好贪杯<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4></FONT> </P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4>满目春花传好信<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4>一堤翠柳醉闲人<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4></FONT> </P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4>花若常开谁说好<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt"><FONT size=4>月如自满怎生闲<p></p></FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt"><p><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=4> </FONT></p></P>

花花

<P align=left 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: mso-pagination: 12.0pt? widow-orphan;><FONT size=4>联都中五班写一副联

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[此贴子已经被作者于2009-6-16 10:54:10编辑过]

云卷

<DIV class=quote><B>以下是引用<I>花花</I>在2009-6-15 11:53:51的发言：</B>

<P align=left break-all; 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4>黄鹤楼</FONT></P>
<P align=left break-all; 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4></FONT></P>
<P align=left break-all; 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4>邀白云入盏，黄鹤作陪，直把河山收眼底</FONT>
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<P align=left break-all; 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4>慕崔颢之名，李白之采，且将笔墨满行囊</FONT>
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<P align=left break-all; 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4></FONT></P>
<P align=left break-all; 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4></FONT><FONT size=3><EM>前2分句自对不工，李白之采造语，分句之间衔接不自然
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<P align=left break-all; 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4>长江滚滚，一泻千年归眼底</FONT>
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<P><FONT size=4></FONT></P><EM><FONT size=4>只黄鹤空空一语有感觉</FONT>
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<P>不过开始这样，还好了：））</P>

云卷

<DIV class=quote><B>以下是引用<I>花魂鸟梦</I>在2009-6-16 8:49:54的发言：</B>

<P>我不知道该找啥题来学习，就只好跟着师姐们背后走了。起了个早，先凑了这三个，后面的再慢慢凑了</P>
<P>【全国卷】</P>
<P WORD-BREAK: break-all? white;><FONT size=3>人无完美，何必行行拔萃
</FONT>
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<P WORD-BREAK: break-all? white;><FONT size=3>技有不同，岂能样样精通</FONT>




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<P>【北京卷】

<P WORD-BREAK: break-all? white;><FONT size=3>天高难阻凌云志

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<P WORD-BREAK: break-all? white;><FONT size=3>路远犹怀破海心</FONT>
<P WORD-BREAK: break-all? white;><FONT size=3><EM>蹈海吧？</EM></FONT>
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<P>【上海卷】</P>
<P WORD-BREAK: break-all? white;><FONT size=3>我入字魂，何须有二

</P></FONT>
<P WORD-BREAK: break-all? white;><FONT size=3>字含我魄，必定只一</FONT>




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此几联基本有个共通问题，上下未能宕开。

云卷

<FONT size=4>为联都中五班写的联 还行吧，第一个更好一些：））</FONT>

花花

<P><FONT size=4>谢谢师傅指正！辛苦了！</FONT></P><P><FONT size=4>我边看边学边练！不怕挨砸！</FONT></P>[em23][em23][em23][em23][em23][em27][em27][em27][em27][em27]

中中

师妹加油！！！！！！！！

风中飞絮

<P align=left 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4>黄鹤楼</FONT></P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4></FONT></P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4>邀白云入盏，黄鹤作陪，直把河山收眼底</FONT> <P><FONT size=4></FONT></P><P><FONT size=4></FONT></P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4>慕崔颢之名，李白之采，且将笔墨满行囊</FONT></P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><FONT size=4>“且将”与后面衔接也不很好，不如上联流畅。</FONT></P>

花魂鸟梦

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[此贴子已经被作者于2009-7-1 15:29:09编辑过]

花魂鸟梦

滴水轩：

平仄染心香，蓄势才情时滴水

风花同茗醉，悠扬曲韵自盈轩

花花

雨
一夜珠帘挂
千山绿被新

春来为润草
秋去竞摧花

花花

山居
借山风扫案
赊皓月读书

枕边思鸟语
梦里解云衫

涧水添闲趣
松风淡性情

闲来斟月饮
醉去抱云眠

云卷

雨
一夜珠帘挂
千山绿被新
喜下联眼界开阔

闲来斟月饮
醉去抱云眠
初有狂生态，加油！

花花

谢谢师傅！

桥
不忍大江分左右
凌空一越贯东西

花花

漓江游记
一
竹筏江中过
山歌岸上飞

二
青山闲入画
碧水醉题诗

三
竹排轻破浪
风光已醉人

云卷

桥
不忍大江分左右
凌空一越贯东西

不错不错，有精神气儿

云卷

漓江一组很清丽，稍微浅了些