好好学习,天天作对~~~~

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<P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句：楼高月隐伤离恨[小葱] <P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>对句:  露重风寒怜叶秋
<p><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm><p><p><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句：岁华落尽空林色[小葱] <P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>对句: 众鸟飞绝断曲音<p><p><p><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm><p><p><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句；笛声不耐风揉碎[小葱] <P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>对句:  路远何堪雨落泞<P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>对句: 时将皓月赊清酒<p><p><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm></P><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句:且卧南山望白云[小葱] <p><p><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm></P><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句:萧萧寒日梅前醉[小葱] <P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>对句:淡淡烟云水底沉<p><p><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm></P><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句:倚门羞把青梅嗅[小葱]</P><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>对句:对曲难将锦瑟弹</P><P align=left none? mso-layout-grid-align: left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>对好几个出句没能理解就对上了,还请小葱MM不吝赐教</P></TD></TR></TABLE>

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<P>平淡GG也好勤快滴说~~~晚上有空一定扔点砖</P>
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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><FONT color=#0000ff>评:对句承接了出句的意境,由出句的伤离恨延伸开来感叹落叶凋零,秋天是伤感的季节!唯一不足的是离恨和叶秋词性稍有不工</FONT></P>
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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><FONT color=#0000ff>评:出句的大概意思是,笛声在风里听起来断断续续,似乎被风揉碎.对句的画面有点略隔.能那么仔细听笛的人,一定是比较清闲的,赶路的人大抵也顾不上听这笛声了,另笛声对路远有点不工</FONT>
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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>出句:且卧南山望白云[小葱]
<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><FONT color=#0000ff>评:好,写尽归隐之淡泊自在</FONT>
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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>出句:萧萧寒日梅前醉[小葱]
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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><FONT color=#0000ff>评:出句的主语是人,寒日萧萧,用萧萧二字来形容,可见主人情绪似乎并不好,看梅花开那么好,唯借梅前一醉~~~~~~对句的意思不是很明朗,不知道描写的是什么,呵呵,也可能是我句出的不好</FONT>
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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>出句:倚门羞把青梅嗅[小葱]</P>
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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><FONT color=#0000ff>评:律工,出句的羞和嗅写出少女娇憨之态,对句在字面上略显平淡</FONT></P>
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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><FONT color=#0000ff>砸完了,汗~~~~~~~~~~~~平淡GG滴功底是大大滴有,小妹滴句子出滴也不是很好.别怪我砸狠了,欢迎回砸,在砸中让我们互相进步~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~``</FONT></P>

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-9-25 22:22:56编辑过]

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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>出句:萧萧寒日梅前醉[小葱]
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汗,我以为是写景之句,寒日不肯离去是因为留恋梅花的缘故[em06]</P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>出句:倚门羞把青梅嗅[小葱]</P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>对句:对曲难将锦瑟弹</P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>这句也是,我始终想不到出句是描写的什么,青梅煮酒,我往这上想了,汗</P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>出句；笛声不耐风揉碎[小葱]
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我的理解是笛声(笛声清越)都受不了风的挤压而断断续续了,心头自然想起遥远路途还有凄风苦雨,[em06]</P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>离恨这句我实在是想不出和它词性相工的,所以凑了,呵呵</P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?>谢谢小葱MM,又长学问了,呵呵</P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?> </P>

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晕~~~,这么晚还在啊,中秋快乐~~~~~~~~[em23][em23][em23]

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呵呵,你不也在吗?一样快乐~~[em24][em24][em23][em23]

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<P 12.0pt? mso-line-height-alt: break-all;><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#000000><FONT color=#0000ff>出句:春鸠鸣杏白[小葱]</FONT>

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[此贴子已经被作者于2007-9-26 22:00:22编辑过]

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<P mso-line-height-alt: break-all; 12.0pt?><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#000000><FONT color=#0000ff>出句:春鸠鸣杏白[小葱]</FONT></FONT></FONT> <P mso-line-height-alt: break-all; 12.0pt?>对句: 紫燕过桃红 <P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><FONT color=#0909f7>出句<FONT face="Times New Roman">:</FONT>一秋酝藉琼苞碎<FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>小葱<FONT face="Times New Roman">]</FONT></FONT></P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT face="Times New Roman"><FONT color=#000000></FONT>
</P><P></FONT></FONT><P><P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#0909f7></FONT></P><P><P mso-line-height-alt: break-all; 12.0pt?><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7>出句:笛声三弄梅心破[小葱]</FONT></FONT></P><P mso-line-height-alt: break-all; 12.0pt?><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT color=#000000>对句:</FONT></FONT></FONT></P><P mso-line-height-alt: break-all; 12.0pt?><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT color=#000000>对句:乌云遮鸟迹</FONT></P><P></FONT></FONT><P><P 12pt? LINE-HEIGHT: break-all;><FONT size=3><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7>出句:大雪没炊烟[小葱]
<P></FONT></FONT></FONT><P><P break-all?><FONT size=3><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7>出句:漾漾泛菱嬉[小葱]</FONT></FONT></FONT></P><P break-all?><FONT size=3><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT color=#000000>对句:亭亭点水欢</FONT></FONT></FONT></FONT></P><P break-all?><FONT size=3><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT color=#000000>对句:深山掩暮霭</FONT>
</P><P></FONT></FONT></FONT><P><P mso-line-height-alt: break-all; 12.0pt?><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT face=宋体>出句:穷巷望荷锄[小葱]</FONT></FONT></P><P mso-line-height-alt: break-all; 12.0pt?><FONT face=宋体>有些出句想破头了也不知啥意思,那个漾漾泛菱嬉出的太好了,对不出只能凑了个,什么琼苞碎,梅心破,头疼,感觉很无奈,有空请详加介绍下哈</FONT></P>[em01][em01]

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<P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align=left><FONT color=#0000ff>出句:白水黑山浓淡画[小葱]</FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align=left><FONT color=#0000ff><p></p></FONT> </P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align=left><FONT color=#0000ff>出句:明月楼头听夜笛[小葱]</FONT></P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align=left><FONT color=#0000ff><p></p></FONT> </P><P 0cm 0cm 0pt; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align=left><FONT color=#0000ff>出句:梅边相忆,无语泪天涯[小葱]<p></p></FONT></P>

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<DIV class=quote><B>以下是引用<I>平淡入微</I>在2007-9-27 18:00:34的发言：</B>

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<P align=left 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none?><FONT color=#0909f7>出句<FONT face="Times New Roman">:</FONT>一秋酝藉琼苞碎<FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>小葱<FONT face="Times New Roman">]</FONT></FONT></P>
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<P break-all; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt?><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT color=#000000>对句:乌云遮鸟迹</FONT></P>
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<P break-all?><FONT size=3><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7>出句:漾漾泛菱嬉[小葱]</FONT></FONT></FONT></P>
<P break-all?><FONT size=3><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT color=#000000>对句:亭亭点水欢</FONT></FONT></FONT></FONT></P>
<P break-all?><FONT size=3><FONT face=宋体><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT color=#000000>对句:深山掩暮霭</FONT></P>
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<P break-all; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt?><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT face=宋体>出句:穷巷望荷锄[小葱]</FONT></FONT></P>
<P break-all; mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt?><FONT face=宋体>有些出句想破头了也不知啥意思,那个漾漾泛菱嬉出的太好了,对不出只能凑了个,什么琼苞碎,梅心破,头疼,感觉很无奈,有空请详加介绍下哈</FONT></P>[em01][em01]</DIV>
<P>嘿嘿~~~~纯属涂鸦,<FONT face=宋体>琼苞碎,梅心破全都是写梅花,最近在看李清照的词,汗汗~~</FONT></P>

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[此贴子已经被作者于2007-9-29 15:47:16编辑过]

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<P align=left WORD-BREAK: 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; break-all; mso-line-height-alt: widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt:>出句:云涛万里风帆舞 ,出句似有问题,云涛和帆没有机联系,风舞帆,云也可以舞帆吗?如果这样出句:风云万里千帆舞,我觉得形象点,

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<P align=left WORD-BREAK: 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; break-all; mso-line-height-alt: widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 12.0pt; auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt:>个人浅见妄评,小葱MM莫怪哈,喝茶</P>[em27][em27][em27][em23][em23]

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-9-29 15:23:32编辑过]

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<DIV class=quote><B>以下是引用<I>平淡入微</I>在2007-9-29 15:22:09的发言：</B>

<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt;>出句:云涛万里风帆舞 ,出句似有问题,云涛和帆没有机联系,风舞帆,云也可以舞帆吗?如果这样出句:风云万里千帆舞,我觉得形象点,


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<P align=left widow-orphan? mso-pagination: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: mso-margin-top-alt: left; TEXT-ALIGN: break-all; WORD-BREAK: 0pt; 0cm mso-line-height-alt: 12.0pt;>出句:渡头日落余孤烟,这句从[渡头余落日,墟里上孤烟]里化出,可惜三平尾了,还得改.我试着这样改:日落孤烟余野渡.或日落余烟孤野渡</P>
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<P>谢谢平淡GG指点,云涛万里风帆舞,我出句的意思并不是云舞帆,云涛万里是想要形容海面的壮阔,后面的帆已经用风来形容舞了.出句描写极目望去,云涛万里,风帆舞的景象.
<P>另,汗死,昨晚没发现出句有三平,现改为        渡头日落孤烟细</P>

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<DIV class=quote><B>以下是引用<I>小葱</I>在2007-9-29 15:46:20的发言：</B>


<P>谢谢平淡GG指点,云涛万里风帆舞,我出句的意思并不是云舞帆,云涛万里是想要形容海面的壮阔,后面的帆已经用风来形容舞了.出句描写极目望去,云涛万里,风帆舞的景象.

<P>另,汗死,昨晚没发现出句有三平,现改为        渡头日落孤烟细</P></DIV>

其实我也想你是描写海面的,但云涛万里用以形容海有些牵强,云有他内在含义了吧,云涛这词也是形容云朵的,所以我认为前后关联不够

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<P>渡头日落孤烟细</P><P>竹里月升淡雾疏</P><P>试对一下,呵呵</P>

小葱

<DIV class=quote><B>以下是引用<I>平淡入微</I>在2007-9-29 17:38:58的发言：</B>


其实我也想你是描写海面的,但云涛万里用以形容海有些牵强,云有他内在含义了吧,云涛这词也是形容云朵的,所以我认为前后关联不够</DIV>

平淡GG认真的态度值得学习.但是我认为一个句子一定要整体的来看,云涛可以用来形容云,也可以用来形容海涛,后三字用风帆舞来描述,我想都应该可以看的出写的是海吧))))欢迎继续讨论

小葱

<P>渡头日落孤烟细</P><P>竹里月升淡雾疏</P><P>我认为平淡GG对句的意境感是有的,但是对句字一定要整体地来对,不能一个字一个字地去对,竹里稍有不妥,一般都是竹外,竹边,竹林里简化成竹里并不合适,拆开看,渡头对竹里,日落对月升,孤烟对淡雾,细对疏都是工对.但是整个句子合在一起就有凑字的痕迹~~</P><P>一起学习,平淡GG也可以出点句子来给我对呀,不过不要太难哦,拆字之类的怕怕~~~~</P><P>先吃饭去</P>

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<p><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句:山月听松语</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>对句:林风带竹歌</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>我也试着出几联哈,呵呵</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句:海阔齐云帆影远</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句:寒风淡日秋萧瑟</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句:万里黄云风漠漠</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句: 一径青苔谁共绿?</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句:新眉恰展春初柳</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句;线密针针慈母意</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>出句:石乳凝珠, 点点滴滴滴点点(呵呵,点点滴滴不停可只滴一点点)</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm>好了,我也算出过了,看下合适不,律估计没大问题,看联意有什么地方不好还请指点</P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm> </P><P align=left WORD-BREAK: mso-margin-top-alt: mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto; 12.0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan? mso-line-height-alt: break-all; left; TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm> </P>

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