704| 4
|
[原创] 油茶赋 |
点评
不知是有意飞雁出群,还是贫于一字,油茶拌饭好像很好吃,就怕吃上瘾后朝暮思。个人浅见:末句可再鍊。
| ||
| ||
| ||
笑口常开润靥容 风姿一展舞苍穹 雪山梅岭随之动 莲绽朝晖相映红 |
||
| ||
楚风轩http://china-liandu.com.cn/forum.php?mod=forumdisplay&fid=173
|
||
|手机版|小黑屋|联都网 ( 闽ICP备2023009884号 )
GMT+8, 2024-10-1 15:44 , Processed in 0.070108 second(s), 22 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.