<P><FONT color=#0000ff size=5>云深浅:</FONT></P>
<P>1.<FONT face="Times New Roman"> 正对、反对、工对、宽对、流水对、回文对、顶针对,技巧联,集句 </FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#f73809 size=4>5分</FONT> </P>
<P><FONT size=3><FONT face="Times New Roman">2.平平仄仄双交替,简单理解135不论,246分明,要避免对联大忌.</FONT></FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#ff0000 size=3>5分</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3>3. 青山欲纵云缠抱=碧水长流谁放逐</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3><FONT color=#f70909>不妨当做意对,别有一解,不错。</FONT><FONT color=#ff0000>8分</FONT></FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3>对句的放逐2字,觉得和上联的意境贴切</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#ff0000 size=3>是整句贴合,不是这两字对上的问题。3分</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3>清清澈澈弯弯绕=隐隐约约静静思</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#f73809 size=3>如果你能看到某物“静静”状态的话 就一定不是“隐隐约约”。</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#f73809 size=3>6分</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3>上联写水,下联写云中山,上下联境在俯首之间.</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#ff3300 size=3>那是你说的。2分。</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3>挟风一镐山筋破=====纵笔千章纸背穿</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#ff3300 size=3>不工且隔。5分。</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3>上下转承随觉突兀,但气势犹好</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#ff3300 size=3>3分。</FONT><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3> </FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3>手执黄花云笑暖=====杯浮明月客斟愁</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#ff3300 size=3>反差比较大啊。有山妹子手执一朵黄花,面对夕阳,微笑,并定格成某种姿势。某骚客见到大喜大惊</FONT><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3><FONT color=#ff3300>,晚上回客店依然回味无穷,思之,进而愁之,最后老酒浇之。</FONT></FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#ff3300 size=3>山里人努力地帮你解释。6分。</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3>不解出句,只能根据黄花来对,笑的意境没对出来</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#ff3300 size=3>且结构有不工嫌疑。4分。</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3>3.心寄尘俗,何求野鹤为知己</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" size=3> 身居山野,且借苍苔作比邻</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#f73809 size=3>山里人本是山里人。你啥时也跑到山里来了呢?你应该学会把古人给忘了。</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#f73809 size=3>联还行。14分。弥补一分。</FONT></P>
<P><FONT face="Times New Roman" color=#f73809 size=3>总分=61+1=62分。(你再验收一下)</FONT></P>
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[此贴子已经被作者于2007-7-4 23:20:17编辑过]
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